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The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below. v.1

The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below. v. 1
The column graph compares the import prices of per kilometre clothing by the European Union from six different countries in 1993 with that of 2003. Overall, the EU paid the highest amount to Argentina for garments import and lowest to Bangladesh in both years. As is seen, the European Union paid around 28 pounds for per kilometre clothes from Argentina in 1993 and this rate was highest. After ten years, it reduced to just over 25 pounds but still, Argentina received the premier price for clothing export to the EU. The second most value paid by the EU for cloth importing from Brazil and both in 1993 and 2003 they were paid roughly 23 pounds for the one-kilometre dress. Japan received exactly 15 pounds for that in 1993 but this rate dropped to roughly 13 pounds after 10 years. China was paid 10 pounds for each kilo costume the EU exported in 1993 and the price hiked to about 17 pounds in just ten years. The EU purchased Indian garments items for approximately 7 pounds a kilo in 1993 and the price doubled in a decade. The least amount for per kilo clothing was paid to Bangladesh by the EU in both of the years but the price went high in 2003 and was 6 pounds compared to half of that in a decade earlier.
The column graph compares the import
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clothing by the European Union from six
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countries in 1993 with that of 2003.
Overall
, the EU
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paid
the highest amount to Argentina for garments import and lowest to Bangladesh in both years.

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, the European Union
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around
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28 pounds
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kilometre
clothes from Argentina in 1993 and this rate was highest. After ten years, it
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reduced
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over
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25 pounds
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but
still
, Argentina received the premier
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price
for clothing export to the EU. The second most value
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paid
by the EU for cloth importing from Brazil and both in 1993 and 2003 they were
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roughly
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23 pounds
for the
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one-kilometre
dress. Japan received exactly
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15 pounds
for that in 1993
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this rate dropped to roughly
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13 pounds
after 10 years. China was
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paid
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10 pounds
for each kilo costume the EU exported in 1993 and the
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price
hiked to about
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17 pounds
in
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ten years. The EU
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purchased
Indian garments items for approximately
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7 pounds
a kilo in 1993 and the
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price
doubled in a decade. The least amount for per kilo clothing was
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paid
to Bangladesh by the EU in both of the years
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the
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went high in 2003 and was
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6 pounds
compared to half of that in a decade earlier.
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IELTS academic The average prices per kilometre of clothing imported into the European Union from six different countries in 1993 and 2003 are shown in the bar chart below. v. 1

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