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The charts below show the average annual spending for Canadian households in the year 1972 and the year 2002. v. 2

The given pie charts compare the amount of money Canadian people used for various households in 1972 and 2002. In general, the sending on Food, Petro, Furniture, and Books witnessed downward trends while the amount consumed for other items decreased over the period. In addition, Canadians used the largest amount for Food in 1972, but the priority changed after the 30-year period for Cars. In 1972, a majority of the spending was for Food (39%) and was 17% more than the amount for Cars. Following that were the figures for Furniture and Petro, making up 11% and 10% respectively. Canadians spent a small minority (under 10%) of their expenditure on the others namely: Restaurants, Computers, and Books. Thirty years later, there was a dramatic increase of 18% in the payment for Cars. With an enormous reduction and increase correspondingly, both Food and Restaurants received the same amount of spending and were the second biggest part, with 14% for each. Likewise, people living in Canada used a similar volume for Petrol and Furniture (9%). Whereas the percentage of Computers climbed slightly by 8% from 3% in 1972, that of Books fell to only 3% from 7% in 1972.

IELTS academic The charts below show the average annual spending for Canadian households in the year 1972 and the year 2002. v.2

The
given
pie charts compare the
amount
of money Canadian
people
used
for various households in 1972 and 2002.
In general
, the sending on
Food
,
Petro
, Furniture, and Books witnessed downward trends while the
amount
consumed for other items decreased over the period.
In addition
, Canadians
used
the largest
amount
for
Food
in 1972,
but
the priority
changed
after the 30-year period for Cars.
In
1972, a majority of the spending was for
Food
(39%) and was 17% more than the
amount
for Cars. Following that were the figures for Furniture and
Petro
, making up 11% and 10%
respectively
. Canadians spent a
small
minority (under 10%) of their expenditure on the others
namely
: Restaurants, Computers, and Books. Thirty years later, there was a dramatic increase of 18% in the payment for Cars. With an enormous reduction and increase
correspondingly
, both
Food
and Restaurants received the same
amount
of spending and were the second biggest part, with 14% for each.
Likewise
,
people
living in Canada
used
a similar volume for Petrol and Furniture (9%). Whereas the percentage of Computers climbed
slightly
by 8% from 3% in 1972, that of Books fell to
only
3% from 7% in 1972.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
Academic
4 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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