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The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010
The pie charts give data for how the local government spent their money on the 9 main segments in the years 2000 and 2010. As seen from the graphs, the percentages of money invested in these segments didn’t change much with the biggest pieces belonged to Education in both years and the smallest sections were also Other in 2000 and 2010. In these two graphs, the 3 biggest parts were always Education, Healthcare and Pensions. The year 2010 had the same proportion in Pensions (19%) as 2000, while the other two biggest segments saw a little decrease in the percentage. As for the smallest segments, the positions were held by Transport, Culture and leisure, and other in both years, although the pieces for the former 2 were slightly bigger in 2010 than 10 years previous, the gaps were not significant (1-2%). The biggest change seen on the pies is from the proportions of Interest of borrowing, which exactly doubled in size in the 10 years’ time (5% to 10%). And the other significant change is from the segments of Welfare which even though did not become two times bigger like the last sections but also had a 5 % increase in the same amount of time. Along side Education and Healthcare, the money spent on Defence was the third sections that suffered a downsize, from 17% to 14% in a decade. Overall, the largest amount of money were always spent on Education, Healthcare and Pensions even though the proportion became a bit smaller in the 10-year period. The biggest expand in a decade belonged to Interest on borrowing. Apart from these minor changes, the structure of the pie charts were relatively the same in both years.
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in 2000 and 2010.

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Education
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2010 had the same proportion in Pensions (19%) as 2000, while the
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in both years, although the pieces for the former 2 were
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on the pies is from the proportions of Interest of borrowing, which exactly doubled in size in the 10 years’ time (5% to 10%). And the
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, from 17% to 14% in a decade.

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, the largest amount of
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Education
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expand in a decade belonged to Interest on borrowing. Apart from these minor
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, the structure of the pie charts were
relatively
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IELTS academic The charts below show local government expenditure in 2000 and 2010

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