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The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.
The pie charts depict the proportion of degrees awarded to students at the National University, particularly in the field of Medicine, Law, Business and Computer Science over three successive decades – 1990, 2000 and 2010. In 1990, both Business and Computer Science received the highest percentages, wherein each received 30% of degrees given to students. Medicine and Law followed closely with 25% and 15%, respectively. In 2000, Computer Science was able to retained the top spot by gaining a 10% increase in percentage, while Medicine gained the second highest percentage at 30%. Business, however, dropped to third place after losing 10% and similarly Law has taken last place after losing 5%. In 2010, standings of the four fields remained similar with Computer Science continuing to dominate at 45% of the degrees given. Medicine retained second place despite losing 5%. Both Business and Law occupied the last spot, each having 15% of the overall standing. In conclusion, over the three decades, there is a steady rise of students graduating in Computer Science at National University. Graduates from other fields like Medicine and Law fluctuated over the years, while Business graduated declined steadily over the years.
The pie charts depict the proportion of degrees awarded to students at the National University,
particularly
in the field of
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Medicine
,
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Law
,
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Business
and Computer
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Science
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over
three successive decades
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–
1990, 2000 and 2010.

In 1990, both
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Business
and Computer
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Science
received the highest percentages, wherein each received 30% of degrees
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given
to students.
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Medicine
and
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Law
followed
closely
with 25% and 15%,
respectively
.

In 2000, Computer
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Science
was able
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to retained
the top spot by gaining a 10% increase in percentage, while
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Medicine
gained the second highest percentage at 30%.
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Business
,
however
, dropped to third place after losing 10% and
similarly
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Law
has taken last place after losing 5%.

In 2010, standings of the four fields remained similar with Computer
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Science
continuing to dominate at 45% of the degrees
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given
.
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Medicine
retained second place despite losing 5%. Both
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Business
and
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Law
occupied the last spot, each having 15% of the
overall
standing.

In conclusion
,
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over
the three decades, there is a steady rise of students graduating in Computer
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Science
at National University. Graduates from other fields like
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Medicine
and
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Law
fluctuated
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over
the years, while
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Business
graduated declined
steadily
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over
the years.
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IELTS academic The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.

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194 words
6.0
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