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the bar chart below shows the number of people visiting two different cites by seasonsSummarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

the bar chart below shows the number of people visiting two different cites by seasons
The given graph illustrates information about how many people visited Dover city and Troy city in different seasons in the year. Overall, there was considerable growth in the number of tourists visiting in Dover city from spring to winter, while the number of people visiting in the Troy city varies significantly over the year by different seasons. More people preferred to spend their time in the summer in Troy city than in Dover city. In contrast, Dover city was a popular destination for tourists in winter. The least number of tourists visitors was in the spring for both cites whit 5000 in Dover and around 4900 in Tory city. Dover city followed a gradual increase and doubled in the summer, while the number of tourists visitor in Troy city rose significantly to about 22000. In the autumn the number of tourists visitors in the Dover city continues to grow moderately by 5000; whereas the number of people visited Troy city decline slightly to 20000, Dover city saw a sustainable boom to 25000 people visitors in winter however it can be seen the number of tourists visitors dropped sharply to 5000
The
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graph illustrates information about how
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many
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people
visited Dover city and Troy city in
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different
seasons in the year.

Overall
, there was considerable growth in the
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number
of
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tourists
visiting in Dover city from spring to winter, while the
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number
of
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people
visiting in the Troy city varies
significantly
over the year by
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different
seasons.

More
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people
preferred to spend their time in the summer in Troy city than in Dover city.
In contrast
, Dover city was a popular destination for
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tourists
in winter. The least
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number
of
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tourists
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visitors
was in the spring for both cites whit 5000 in Dover and around 4900 in Tory city.

Dover city followed a gradual increase and doubled in the summer, while the
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number
of
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tourists
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visitor
in Troy city rose
significantly
to about 22000. In the autumn the
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number
of
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tourists
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visitors
in the Dover city continues to grow
moderately
by 5000; whereas the
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number
of
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people
visited Troy city decline
slightly
to 20000, Dover city
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saw
a sustainable boom to 25000
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people
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visitors
in winter
however
it can be
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seen
the
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number
of
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tourists
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visitors
dropped
sharply
to 5000
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic the bar chart below shows the number of people visiting two different cites by seasons

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4 paragraphs
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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