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The bar graph provides information about the most Common sports played in New Zealand in 2002. v.1

The bar graph provides information about the most Common sports played in New Zealand in 2002. v. 1
The proportion of boys and girls playing particular sports in New Zealand in 2002 is shown in the bar graph. It is evident that their sporting preference tended to be different. Soccer was the most popular sports among the boys, proofed with the high participation rate of almost 25%. Meanwhile, the sports with least popularity between boys was netball with only below than 5% of participation. In contrast, netball became the most played sports the girls with 25% while the lowest participation was shown in cricket with approximately 1%. The other sports such as swimming any other sports were also demanded among New Zealand’s children with approximately 20%. However, the tennis, basketball, martial arts, and athletics were less popular with only below than 10% participants
The proportion of boys and girls playing particular
sports
in New Zealand in 2002
is shown
in the bar graph. It is evident that their sporting preference tended to be
different
.

Soccer was the most popular
sports
among the boys, proofed with the high participation rate of almost 25%. Meanwhile, the
sports
with
least
popularity between boys was netball with
only
below
than 5% of participation.
In contrast
, netball became the most played
sports
the girls with 25% while the lowest participation
was shown
in cricket with approximately 1%.

The other
sports
such as swimming any other
sports
were
also
demanded among New Zealand’s children with approximately 20%.
However
, the tennis, basketball, martial arts, and athletics were less popular with
only
below than 10% participants
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar graph provides information about the most Common sports played in New Zealand in 2002. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
124 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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