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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television however television cannot replace the book as a learning tool which is why children are less well educated today To what extent do you agree with this statement v.2

Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television however television cannot replace the book as a learning tool which is why children are less well educated today 2
In the contemporary world has technology-focused society and every movement, new inventions are becoming more and more while television is played a vital role in modern life. So it is said that children are less well-educated in modern society as a result of watching tv on behalf of reading books. Actually, it is entirely straightforward and I strongly agree with this assertion. To begin with, I glad to say, I have a plethora of reasons for positively this statement. Firstly, reading books is an essential thing every children life because they can get numerous information and knowledge through various books such as educated, biography and translated so on. Some expert said that reading is completed every person. In the past time, most of the offsprings spent their time with books, consequently, their IQ level was climbed rapidly. But now, students are wasted their valuable time in front of the television which is called an idiot box. For instance, Many tv channels telecast cartoons, movies and not educated programmes that mean those pragrammes are not suitable to children aged. Watching cartoons while offsprings had been created dream world their mind like cartoon animation then they try to spend their life like cartoon with various heros which is directly effected offspring' s life and their future. In addition, few tv channels telecast some education related programmes but children do not like to involve that programmes because they have motivated any other programmes such as reality programmes, music and dance competitions. Those were brought student' s mind and thoughts aside from studying while they could be reached less well-educated level easily. By this, the IQ level of children went down and their life and future all are covered dark smoke. To recapitulate, considering the above paragraphs, It would seem that using television that means spending most of the time television rather than study hours definitely children can achieve their law level intelligence.
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television
is played
a vital role in modern
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life
.
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So
it
is said
that
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children
are less well-educated in modern society
as a result
of watching
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tv
on behalf of reading
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books
. Actually, it is
entirely
straightforward and I
strongly
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agree
with this assertion.

To
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begin
with,
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I
glad to say, I have a plethora of reasons for
positively
this statement.
Firstly
, reading
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books
is an essential thing every
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children
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life
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because
they can
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get
numerous information and knowledge through various
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books
such as educated, biography and translated
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so
on.
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Some
expert said that reading
is completed
every person. In the past
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time
, most of the
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offsprings
spent their
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time
with
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books
,
consequently
, their IQ
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level
was climbed
rapidly
.
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But
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now
, students
are wasted
their valuable
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time
in front of the
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television
which
is called
an idiot box.
For instance
,
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Many
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tv
channels telecast
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cartoons
, movies and not educated
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programmes
that mean those
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pragrammes
are not suitable to
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children
aged. Watching
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cartoons
while
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offsprings
had
been created
dream world their mind like
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cartoon
animation then they try to spend their
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life
like
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cartoon
with various
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heros
which is
directly
effected
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offspring&
#039; s
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life
and their future.

In addition
, few
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tv
channels telecast
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some
education related
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programmes
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but
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children
do not like to involve that
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programmes
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because
they have motivated any other
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programmes
such as reality
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programmes
, music and dance competitions. Those
were brought
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student&
#039; s mind and thoughts aside from studying while they could
be reached
less well-educated
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level
easily
. By this, the IQ
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level
of
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children
went down and their
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life
and future all
are covered
dark smoke.

To recapitulate, considering the above paragraphs, It would seem that using
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television
that means spending most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
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television
rather
than study hours definitely
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children
can achieve their law
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level
intelligence.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes
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IELTS academic Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television however television cannot replace the book as a learning tool which is why children are less well educated today 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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