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The table charts below provide information about the destinations and employment of UK first degree holders Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The table charts below provide information about the destinations and employment of UK first degree holders
The table and pie charts illustrate the destination and the salary ranges of UK 2009/2010 graduates. In the table, overall, the pattern in graduates’ destination altered very little over the period from 2007 to 2010. To specify, the largest amount was seen in the full-time employment with around 60% over 4 years, followed by further study only with about 17%. In addition, while 7-9% graduates opted to mix part-time employed and study, 11-15% of graduates were unemployed. In two pie charts, the general overview is that the majority of graduated students earned the salary between £15, 000 and £25, 000 per year with over 50%. Whereas, 21% of male graduates and 23% of female graduates have the lower salary. Nevertheless, in the higher salary bands, the percentage of women always surpassed by men. For instance, 23% of male graduates have the salary in the range from £25, 000 to £40, 000 compared to the figure of 16% in the male group. Surprisingly, only in the men group could we see the salary band of over £40, 000. In conclusion, although the plurality of students got a job after graduation, men tend to earned more than their female counterparts do.
The table and pie charts illustrate the destination and the
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ranges of UK 2009/2010 graduates.

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overall
, the pattern in
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graduates’
destination altered
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very
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little
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over
the period from 2007 to 2010. To specify, the largest amount was
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seen
in the full-time employment with around 60%
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over
4 years, followed by
further
study
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only
with about 17%.
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, while 7-9%
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graduates
opted to mix part-time employed and study, 11-15% of
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graduates
were unemployed
.

In two pie charts, the general overview is that the majority of graduated students earned the
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salary
between £15, 000 and £25, 000 per year with
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over
50%. Whereas, 21% of male
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graduates
and 23% of female
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graduates
have the lower
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salary
.
Nevertheless
, in the higher
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salary
bands, the percentage of women always surpassed by
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men
.
For instance
, 23% of male
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graduates
have the
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salary
in the range from £25, 000 to £40, 000 compared to the figure of 16% in the male group.
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,
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only
in the
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men
group could we
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the
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band of
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over
£40, 000.

In conclusion
, although the plurality of students
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got
a job after graduation,
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men
tend to earned more than their female counterparts do.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The table charts below provide information about the destinations and employment of UK first degree holders

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199 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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