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1: The information below gives details about household income and spendingon food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v.2

1: The information below gives details about household income and spendingon food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v. 2
The pie chart and table give information about domestic income and the percentage of spending on food and clothes from an average family in Uk in 2010 and 2013. Overall, the table witnessed a fall of total income after 3 years and a rise of spending on food and clothes. Over a 3-year period, the need for fruits and vegetables and dairy products had increased while that for clothes and meat and fish dropped. Looking at the table, The total income fell from 29000 to 25000 dollars and the money spending for food and clothes grew by 1000 dollars. The figure for total income in the year 2010 was slightly 2 times higher than that for expenditures on clothes and food. Moving to the pie chart. The percentage of clothes decreased from the second highest with 22 percent to the lowest with 12 percent after 3 years. The most significant rise belonged to money spending on fruits and vegetables from 20 to 35 percent. Uk saw an unchanged data for other clothes and food with 18 percent. Whereas the percentage of dairy products grew moderately by 10 percent, that of meat and fish reduced considerably 10 percent.
The pie chart and table give information about domestic
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income
and the percentage of
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spending
on
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food
and
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clothes
from an average family in
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Uk
in 2010 and 2013.

Overall
, the table witnessed a fall of total
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income
after 3 years and a rise of
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spending
on
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food
and
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clothes
. Over a
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3-year
period, the need for fruits and vegetables and dairy products had increased while that for
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clothes
and meat and fish dropped.

Looking at the table, The total
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income
fell from 29000 to 25000 dollars and the money
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spending
for
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food
and
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clothes
grew by 1000 dollars. The figure for total
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income
in the
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year
2010 was
slightly
2 times higher than that for expenditures on
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clothes
and food.

Moving to the pie chart. The percentage of
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clothes
decreased from the second highest with 22
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percent
to the lowest with 12
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percent
after 3 years. The most significant rise belonged to money
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spending
on fruits and vegetables from 20 to 35
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percent
.
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Uk
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saw
an unchanged data for other
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clothes
and
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food
with 18
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percent
. Whereas the percentage of dairy products grew
moderately
by 10
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percent
, that of meat and fish
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reduced
considerably
10
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percent
.
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic 1: The information below gives details about household income and spendingon food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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