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The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050. v.4

The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050. v. 4
The supplied pie charts depict populations of different ages in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and give predictions for 2050 based on people’s age. In general, both countries, Yemen and Italy, are forecasted to have adolescent and adult as the vast majority of populations in 2050. Looking at the details, in Yemen in 2000, children and teens accounted the biggest proportion of citizen, 50. 1%. In contrast, senior population was the lowest proportion of population, only 3. 6%. Meanwhile, young adults and adults amassed 46. 3% of total population. However, it is predicted that in 2050, the number of adult population will dominate significantly the proportion of people abiding in Yemen, 57. 3% and approximately 10% higher than in 2000. Vice versa, percentage of people aged 0-14 years will be decreased to 37%, about 13% lower than in 2000. Seniors will be remained as the tiniest fraction among all age categories, only 5. 7% in 2002. Meanwhile, In Italy, adult reckoned the highest 61. 6% of the total citizen in 2000, followed by the elderly people's percentage which came in the second place, 24. 1% and toddlers and children counted only 14. 3%. In 2050, it is forecasted that adult population will still be the highest proportion, 46. 2% and the number of seniors will be about 42. 3%, almost twice higher than in 2000. On the other hand, children’s percentage will be declined to only 11. 5%.
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in 2050.

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, in Yemen in 2000, children and teens accounted the biggest
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proportion
of citizen, 50. 1%.
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, senior
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population
was the lowest
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,
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3. 6%. Meanwhile, young
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and
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amassed 46. 3% of total
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.
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, it
is predicted
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population
will dominate
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people
abiding in Yemen, 57. 3% and approximately 10% higher than in 2000. Vice versa, percentage of
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people
aged 0-14 years will
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to 37%, about 13% lower than in 2000. Seniors will
be remained
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5. 7% in 2002.

Meanwhile, In Italy, adult reckoned the highest 61. 6% of the total citizen in 2000, followed by the elderly
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's percentage which came in the second place, 24. 1% and toddlers and children counted
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14. 3%. In 2050, it
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, 46. 2% and the number of seniors will be about 42. 3%, almost twice higher than in 2000.
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, children’s percentage will
be declined
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only
11. 5%.
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IELTS academic The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050. v. 4

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