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The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050. v.2

The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050. v. 2
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of populations in Yemen and Italy according to 3 different age groups in 2000, with the future forecast for 2050.   It can be seen that in both countries the general trend is for a predicted increase in the population of people aged 60+ and a decrease in those aged 0-14 by 2050. Looking at Yemen in 2000, around half of the population was aged 0-14 but this is predicted to decline by 13% by 2050.   On the contrary, the 60+ age group will increase by 2% by 2050 to a figure of 5. 7%.   Likewise, those aged 15-59 years is forecast to increase from 46. 3% to 57. 3%. Turning now to Italy in 2000, there is a similar rise predicted for 60 plus age group; from around 24% in 2000 to 42. 3% by 2050.   The -0-14 age-groups, like in Yemen, is predicted to decrease by around 3% by 2050 to a figure of 11. 5%.   Those aged 15-59 years is forecast to plummet by about 15% to a figure of 46. 2%. To conclude, in Yemen and Italy we would expect to observe an increase in elderly in 60+ by 2050.   By contrast, it is predicted that the 0-14 age group would plummet by 2050.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of populations in Yemen and Italy according to 3
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