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The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050. v.3

The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050. v. 3
The charts illustrate the proportion of people of different ages in 2000 in two countries: Yemen and Italy and also forecast the data for the year 2050. According to the charts, the main age of the population in Yemen will change from people below 15 years old to those between 15 and 59 years old. However, people who were 65 years old and more comprised the least portion of the population in Yemen in 2000 and in 2050 this same trend will persist. The trend in Italy is slightly different. Although people who were between 15 and 59 years old were the biggest population in Italy, the number will decrease sharply from 2000 to 2050. 61. 6% of people were in the range of 15 and 59 years old, but it is predicted that in 2050, people in this certain range of age will only take 46. 2%. On the other hand, the number of people at 60 years old and more will increase significantly. The proportion of people at 60 years old and above in 2050 is almost as twice as in 2000. In summary, the trends of the change on the ages of people in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050 are different.
The charts illustrate the proportion of
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in 2000 in two countries: Yemen and Italy and
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below 15 years
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to those between 15 and 59 years
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,
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who were 65 years
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and more comprised the least portion of the population in Yemen in 2000 and in 2050 this same trend will persist.

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. Although
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who were between 15 and 59 years
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were the biggest population in Italy, the number will decrease
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were in the range of 15 and 59 years
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at 60 years
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at 60 years
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and above in 2050 is almost as twice as in 2000.

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IELTS academic The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050. v. 3

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