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Cambridge 6- test 4- task 1The charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v.2

Cambridge 6- test 4- task 1The charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v. 2
The 2 charts show the quantity of married and divorced Americans in the period between 1970 and 2000 and the marital status of mature people in the USA in 1970 and 2000. Overall, there was a steady reduction in the marriage rate but the number of married people gained the highest percentage. It is clear that there were 2. 5 million of American marriages in 1970, and this number was higher than that of divorces in the USA (1 million). In a span of 30 years, while the number of marriages decreased gradually, the number of people who divorced was generally unchanged. However, the marriages still higher than the divorces. As it can be seen that 70% of American adults was married, then it had fallen to under 60%. The percentage of this status among American adults was extremely higher than that of other marital status. While the percentage of single people increased slightly from 10% to 20%, the proportion of widowed and divorced people was under 10%.
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marriage
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gained the highest percentage.

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that there were 2. 5 million of American
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marriages
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was higher than that of divorces in the USA (1 million). In a span of 30 years, while the
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number
of
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marriages
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who divorced was
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that 70% of American adults
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increased
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from 10% to 20%, the proportion of widowed and divorced
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was under 10%.
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IELTS academic Cambridge 6- test 4- task 1The charts below give the information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
168 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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