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The charts below give information about the percentage of sources of the electricity produced between 2003 nd 2008 0f 4 counties v.2

The charts below give information about the percentage of sources of the electricity produced between 2003 nd 2008 0f 4 counties v. 2
Four pie charts compare the amount of electricity which manufactured from some different power resources of four nations from 2003 to 2008. Overall, India and Sweden produced power from three kinds of materials while the other countries only used two sources to create electricity. There are three types of sources of the electricity produced between 2003 and 2008 in India and Sweden. Fossil fuel was used the most popular in India in India with 80%, which accounted for 4%- the smallest percentage in Sweden. Only 3, 5% of electricity was made from nuclear power in India while this was the principal material to produce power with 65% in Sweden. The percentage of hydropower of the electricity produced was 16, 5% and 31% in India and Sweden respectively. Marocco and Viet Nam manufactured electricity from fossil fuel and hydropower. The proportion of fossil fuel in Marocco was 9, 5% while the amount of hydropower was only 4, 5%. The percentage of two kinds of this sources in Viet Nam was quite equal with 47% of fossil fuel and 53% of the other source.
Four pie charts compare the amount of
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which manufactured from
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different
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resources of four nations from 2003 to 2008.
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, India and Sweden produced
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power
from three kinds of materials while the other countries
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two
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to create electricity.

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of the
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electricity
produced between 2003 and 2008 in India and Sweden.
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Fossil
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fuel
was
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used
the most popular
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in India in India
with 80%, which accounted for 4%- the smallest percentage in Sweden.
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3, 5% of
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electricity
was made
from nuclear
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in India while this was the principal material to produce
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with 65% in Sweden. The percentage of hydropower of the
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produced was 16, 5% and 31% in India and Sweden
respectively
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Marocco
and
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Nam manufactured
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electricity
from
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fossil
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fuel
and hydropower. The proportion of
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fossil
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fuel
in
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Marocco
was 9, 5% while the amount of hydropower was
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only
4, 5%. The percentage of two kinds of
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sources
in
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Viet
Nam was quite equal with 47% of
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fossil
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fuel
and 53% of the other
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source
.
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IELTS academic The charts below give information about the percentage of sources of the electricity produced between 2003 nd 2008 0f 4 counties v. 2

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