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The two tables show the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment. v.2

The two tables show the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment. v. 2
The given two pictures depict comparative total guess who visit Ashdown Museum. It describes the different year of before and after reconstruction. The amount of gap is 74. 000 before and 92. 000 after fixation. Frist of all the two pie charts show off the various options to deliver the description of visitors opinion. The scales are very satisfied, satisfied, dissatisfied, very dissatisfied, and no response. The first chart seems that most tourist choose dominantly in dissatisfaction, it also achieved the hugest rate 40%. By contrast, 5% people do not give their response at all. Furthermore, It is clearly makes a change of the guess’observation over their mark. The option “very satisfied” has peaked by time and reaches 35% when the previous percentage only acquire 15%. Therefore it increases 20% by a good progress. Moreover, the dramatic rate also turns from dissatisfied to satisfied. Those have similar number in 40%. Meanwhile, the dissatisfaction just takes 15% of all. Related to this, the visitors obviously represent the satisfaction consideration about this new construction of museum.
The
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two pictures depict comparative total guess who visit
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Ashdown
Museum. It
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describes
the
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different
year of
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before
and after reconstruction. The amount of gap is 74. 000
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before
and 92. 000 after fixation.

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Frist
of all the two pie charts
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show
off the various options to deliver the description of visitors opinion. The scales are
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very
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satisfied
,
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satisfied
, dissatisfied,
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very
dissatisfied, and no response. The
first
chart seems that most tourist choose
dominantly
in dissatisfaction, it
also
achieved the hugest rate 40%. By contrast, 5%
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people
do not give their response at all.

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, It is
clearly
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makes
a
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change
of the guess’observation over their mark. The option “
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very
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satisfied”
has peaked by time and reaches 35% when the previous percentage
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only
acquire 15%.
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Therefore
it increases 20% by a
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good
progress.
Moreover
, the dramatic rate
also
turns from dissatisfied to
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satisfied
. Those have similar number in 40%. Meanwhile, the dissatisfaction
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just
takes 15% of all. Related to this, the visitors
obviously
represent the satisfaction consideration about this new construction of museum.
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IELTS academic The two tables show the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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