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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that be v.18

A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that be v. 18
Most of the developed landmarks in this prestigious planet highly depend on the travelers as they act as the major source to provide financial aid for the specific region they visit to. However, if not bound by the rules it can also be the leading issue to undermine culture by commercialization which often creates vandalism in various sectors. This essay firstly explains the merits of tourism in boosting economic sector, likewise, secondly it provides detail on demerits of their involvement in the contemporary world and at last it will reach towards the relevant conclusion. Tourist are the one who play the most significant role to expand and share knowledge and experience which in return assists the whole world to learn about the area with such variety. It will be the major source which will influence the individual to travel in area consisting the remarkable features. Moreover, the tourism sector acts as a major cause to increase income of the country directly or indirectly from expenses they make while travelling, entertaining, staying, researching or even serving with mega projects. For instance, Recent data from World Tourism Organization revealed that the popular nation like France with remarkable tourist destination can earn up to more than 70 % of revenue from national and international tourism. Thus, tourism is the primary reason for their development. With rapid increase in tourism there of course will be chaos when it comes to culture and tradition of the nation. Different tradition and cultural priority can dismantle different sector of the nation. If the culture followed by international tradition are prioritized more in a nation then it does loose the cultural importance which in a long run can impact the tourism sector. This in return will cause clash among variety of cultures throughout the nation. However, if certain rules are implied and implemented then with proper morale these can be the problem of the past. In conclusion, tourism is the crucial sector to develop the financial aspect of the country which contributes more in development of the nation welfare; however, it does possess a threat that can be solved easily with proper rules being forecasted and implemented in the tourist affected region.
Most of the developed landmarks in this prestigious planet
highly
depend on the travelers as they act as the major source to provide financial aid for the specific region they visit to.
However
, if not bound by the
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rules
it can
also
be the leading issue to undermine
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culture
by commercialization which
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often
creates vandalism in various
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sectors
. This essay
firstly
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explains
the merits of
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tourism
in boosting economic
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sector
,
likewise
,
secondly
it provides detail on demerits of their involvement in the contemporary world and at last it will reach towards the relevant conclusion.

Tourist are the one who play the most significant role to expand and share knowledge and experience which in return assists the whole world to learn about the area with such variety. It will be the major source which will influence the individual to travel in area consisting the remarkable features.
Moreover
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sector
acts as a major cause to increase income of the country
directly
or
indirectly
from expenses they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
while travelling, entertaining, staying, researching or even serving with mega projects.
For instance
, Recent data from World
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Tourism
Organization revealed that the popular
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nation
like France with remarkable tourist destination can earn up to more than 70 % of revenue from national and international
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tourism
.
Thus
,
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tourism
is the primary reason for their development.

With rapid increase in
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tourism
there
of course
will be chaos when it
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comes
to
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culture
and tradition of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Different
tradition and cultural priority can dismantle
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different
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sector
of the
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nation
. If the
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culture
followed by international tradition
are prioritized
more in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
then it does loose the cultural importance which in a long run can impact the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tourism
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sector
. This in return will cause clash among variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cultures
throughout the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
.
However
, if certain
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
are implied
and implemented then with proper morale these can be the problem of the past.

In conclusion
,
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tourism
is the crucial
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sector
to develop the financial aspect of the country which contributes more in development of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
welfare;
however
, it does possess a threat that can
be solved
easily
with proper
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
being forecasted
and implemented in the tourist
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affected
region.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that be v. 18

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4 paragraphs
364 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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