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the charts below give information about levels of education in Glasgow a city in Scotland in 2010 v.1

the charts below give information about levels of education in Glasgow a city in Scotland in 2010 v. 1
The given charts compares educational degree according to five different age groups and gender in a city in Scotland in 2010. Overall, educational levels appeared to be directly proportional to age range and only minor differences was seen between men and women in terms of academic qualifications. Over 70 per cent Glasgow residents aged from 16 to 50 gained university degree, this figure fell steadily to just a half with the fourth age group and a quarter with those over 75 years old. In contrast, the rate of people in Glasgow have no educational degree increased dramatically from only 9 per cent with the first three age groups to nearly three quarters with the final age group. Those attained school certificate remained relatively stable over four initial age groups at about 20 per cent, then took a free fall to only 3 per cent with those who were over 75 years old. In terms of the pie chart, both the rate of men and women gained school certificate were the same at about 33 per cent. The proportion of Glasgow male had tertiary education was slightly higher than female, while the trend for those men and women who have no qualifications was reverse.
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and gender in a city in Scotland in 2010.

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proportional to
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range and
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minor differences was
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and women in terms of academic qualifications.

Over 70 per cent Glasgow residents aged from 16 to 50 gained university degree, this figure fell
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to
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and a quarter with those over 75 years
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in Glasgow have no educational degree increased
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9 per cent with the
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three
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to
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age
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. Those attained school certificate remained
relatively
stable over four initial
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age
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at about 20 per cent, then took a free fall to
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3 per cent with those who were over 75 years
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In terms of the pie chart, both the rate of
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and women gained school certificate were the same at about 33 per cent. The proportion of Glasgow male had tertiary education was
slightly
higher than female, while the trend for those
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men
and women who have no qualifications was reverse.
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IELTS academic the charts below give information about levels of education in Glasgow a city in Scotland in 2010 v. 1

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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