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The bar chart below shows the percentage of population playing ten top sports in Canada in 1998 and 2005. v.2

The bar chart below shows the percentage of population playing ten top sports in Canada in 1998 and 2005. v. 2
The bar chart compares the proportion of the Canadian who took part in ten most popular sports in two separate years 1998 and 2005. It is clear from the given chart that golf was by far the most attractive sport. The most significant change was seen in baseball after 7 years period, while others saw a minor ones. In 1998, nearly 22 per cent of Cacada residents chose to play golf, which was considerably higher than the rest sports, followed by a slight rise to 23 per cent in 2005. This upward trend also saw in cycling and soccer, which players increased to 6 per cent and 10 per cent, respectively in the final year surveyed. Baseball witnessed the largest gap between two years in terms of people joining this sport, which approximately a half of those players fell after 7 years. Ice hockey, similarly, although attracted almost 18 per cent population in 1998, saw a downward tendency to around 17 per cent in 2005. The percentage of those people were involved in the rest of top ten sports also reduced by about a mere 2 per cent after 7 years period surveyed, namely tennis, downhill skiing, volleyball, basketball, and swimming.
The bar chart compares the proportion of the Canadian who
took part
in ten most popular
sports
in two separate years 1998 and 2005.

It is
clear
from the
given
chart that golf was by far the most attractive
sport
. The most significant
change
was
seen
in baseball after 7 years period, while others
saw
a minor
ones
.

In 1998,
nearly
22 per cent of
Cacada
residents chose to play golf, which was
considerably
higher than the rest
sports
, followed by a slight rise to 23 per cent in 2005. This upward trend
also
saw
in cycling and soccer, which players increased to 6 per cent and 10 per cent,
respectively
in the final
year
surveyed.

Baseball witnessed the largest gap between two years in terms of
people
joining this
sport
, which approximately a half of those players fell after 7 years. Ice hockey,
similarly
, although attracted almost 18 per cent population in 1998,
saw
a downward tendency to around 17 per cent in 2005. The percentage of those
people
were involved
in the rest of top ten
sports
also
reduced
by about a mere 2 per cent after 7 years period surveyed,
namely
tennis, downhill skiing, volleyball, basketball, and swimming.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of population playing ten top sports in Canada in 1998 and 2005. v. 2

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201 words
6.5
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