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The graph below shows the amount in grams of potatoes, pasta and rice eaten in a European country between 1976 and 2006. v.2

The graph below shows the amount in grams of potatoes, pasta and rice eaten in a European country between 1976 and 2006. v. 2
The line graph presents information on weekly potato, pasta and rice consumption per person in a European country over a period of 30 years, commencing from 1976, measured in grams. Overall, the consumption of potatoes and rice declined over the time while pasta intake increased significantly. Now getting back to the details, initial consumption of potatoes was over 400 grams per person in a week while it was roughly 300 grams for rice and pasta. The amount of pasta consumption rose gradually from 1976 to 1996 and remained steady to reach the peak in 2006 approximately at 500 grams per person in a week. In contrast, the intake of potatoes showed a fluctuation between 1976 and 1996. Furthermore, potatoes intake reached the nadir about 100 grams per person per week in 2006. It can be clearly seen that the rice consumption fluctuated from 1976 to 1996 and then the consumption of that dropped moderately. However, from 2001 to 2006 there was a rising of rice consumption in a European country. During the period its consumption dropped from 300 grams to just over 200 grams.
The line graph presents information on weekly
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potato
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pasta
and
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rice
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consumption
per
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person
in a European country
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over
a period of 30 years, commencing from 1976, measured in
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grams
.
Overall
, the
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consumption
of
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potatoes
and
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rice
declined
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over
the time while
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pasta
intake increased
significantly
.

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Now
getting back to the
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details
, initial
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consumption
of
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potatoes
was
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over
400
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grams
per
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person
in a week while it was roughly 300
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grams
for
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rice
and
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pasta
. The amount of
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pasta
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consumption
rose
gradually
from 1976 to 1996 and remained steady to reach the peak in 2006 approximately at 500
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grams
per
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person
in a week.
In contrast
, the intake of
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potatoes
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showed
a fluctuation between 1976 and 1996.
Furthermore
,
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potatoes
intake reached the nadir about 100
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grams
per
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person
per week in 2006.

It can be
clearly
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seen
that the
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rice
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consumption
fluctuated from 1976 to 1996 and then the
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consumption
of that dropped
moderately
.
However
, from 2001 to 2006 there was a rising of
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rice
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consumption
in a European country. During the period its
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consumption
dropped from 300
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grams
to
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just
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over
200
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grams
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the amount in grams of potatoes, pasta and rice eaten in a European country between 1976 and 2006. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
184 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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