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The graph below shows the amount in grams of potatoes, pasta and rice eaten in a European country between 1976 and 2006. v.1

The graph below shows the amount in grams of potatoes, pasta and rice eaten in a European country between 1976 and 2006. v. 1
The line graph compares the intake of three food items – potato, pasta and rice in a European country between 1976 and 2006. The unit is given in grams and it represents the consumption by each person in a week. Overall, potato consumption was higher than rice and pasta consumption in the 1970s but after three decades, pasta became the most popular. Getting back to the details, around 400 grams of potato was consumed by each person in a week in 1976 in this country. At that time, the consumption of rice was exactly 300 grams, which was slightly higher than that of pasta. After ten years, pasta consumption skyrocketed while rice consumption plummeted and potato intake slightly dropped. In 1996, pasta became the highest consumed food at 500 grams while potato intake dropped to around 300 grams and rice below 20 grams. Finally, in 2006, pasta intake stood at 500 grams as it was 10 years earlier while potato eating per person further dipped and reached the nadir at only 100 grams. With a slight increase in potato consumption than 5 years earlier, potato remained as the second most preferred food in this country.
The line graph compares the
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of three food items
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potato
,
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pasta
and
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rice
in a European country between 1976 and 2006. The unit is
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given
in
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grams
and it represents the
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consumption
by each person in a week.
Overall
,
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potato
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consumption
was higher than
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rice
and
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pasta
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consumption
in the 1970s
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after three decades,
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pasta
became the most popular.

Getting back to the
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details
, around 400
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grams
of
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potato
was consumed
by each person in a week in 1976 in this country. At that time, the
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consumption
of
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rice
was exactly 300
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grams
, which was
slightly
higher than that of
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pasta
. After ten years,
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pasta
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consumption
skyrocketed while
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rice
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consumption
plummeted and
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potato
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intake
slightly
dropped. In 1996,
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pasta
became the highest consumed food at 500
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grams
while
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potato
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intake
dropped to around 300
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grams
and
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rice
below 20
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grams
.
Finally
, in 2006,
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pasta
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stood at 500
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grams
as it was 10 years earlier while
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potato
eating per person
further
dipped and reached the nadir at
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only
100
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grams
. With a slight increase in
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potato
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consumption
than 5 years earlier,
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potato
remained as the second most preferred food in this country.
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39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the amount in grams of potatoes, pasta and rice eaten in a European country between 1976 and 2006. v. 1

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195 words
6.0
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