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The chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000. v.1

The chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000. v. 1
The given pie chart gives information about the local cinema goers in the year 2000. The visitors to the cinema are divided into 5 main categories based on their age and the percentages of their numbers indicate that elder people went to movies more than younger people. As given in the chart, the percentage of older (over 54 years old) people who went to the cinema comprises more than half of the total cinema visitors. This indicates the trend of cinema watching tendency of older people. They went to visit cinema hall more frequently than all other cinema viewers. People who were between 31 to 45 years old showed the least interest and their percentage of visiting cinema went lowest (only 5%). Among the other three age groups ( aged from 10 to 30), younger people showed more interests than adults and thus the age group 10-15 went to watch cinema more than other two age groups. After the age 20, the interest of going to cinema declined according to the graph and that increased dramatically among the older people.
The
given
pie chart gives information about the local
cinema
goers in the year 2000. The visitors to the
cinema
are divided
into 5 main categories based on their
age
and the percentages of their numbers indicate that elder
people
went
to movies more than younger
people
.

As
given
in the chart, the percentage of older (over 54 years
old
)
people
who
went
to the
cinema
comprises more than half of the total
cinema
visitors. This indicates the trend of
cinema
watching tendency of older
people
. They
went
to visit
cinema
hall more
frequently
than all other
cinema
viewers.

People
who were
between 31 to 45
years
old
showed
the least interest and their percentage of visiting
cinema
went
lowest (
only
5%). Among the other three
age
groups
(
aged from 10 to 30), younger
people
showed
more interests than adults and
thus
the
age
group 10-15
went
to
watch
cinema
more than other two
age
groups. After the
age
20, the interest of going to
cinema
declined according to the graph and that increased
dramatically
among the older
people
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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