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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. v.2

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. v. 2
The line graph illustrates changes in reading habits of male and female readers at Burnaby public library, in 3 years, starting from 2011. Overall, women read more books than males in 2011 at Burnaby Public Library, but the number of books that men read continually increased as time went by while for women, this figure declined after having risen steadily for the first 2 years. In details, men and women read 3, 000 and 5, 000 books respectively in 2011 at Burnaby Public Library. And it clearly shows that women enjoyed more books than men did. And in the following year, while the number of books men finished reading increased by one-third, it increased by 5 thousand for women, exactly twice as many books as the figure for men. It is worth noticing that women and men read the same number of books (10, 000) in the year 2013, as men's interest in books skyrocketed. Women also read more books this year than in 2012, but the change was less noticeable (exactly a quarter). Additionally, the figure for men furtherly surged to 14 thousand books in 2014, but there was a fall regarding the reading habits of women, as the number of books went down to 7 thousand.
The line graph illustrates
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changes
in reading habits of male and female readers at
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Burnaby
public library, in 3 years, starting from 2011.

Overall
,
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women
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read
more
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books
than males in 2011 at
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Burnaby
Public Library,
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but
the
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number
of
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books
that
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men
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read
continually
increased as time went by while for
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women
, this figure declined after having risen
steadily
for the
first
2 years.

In
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details
,
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men
and
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women
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read
3, 000 and 5, 000
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books
respectively
in 2011 at
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Burnaby
Public Library. And it
clearly
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shows
that
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women
enjoyed more
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books
than
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men
did. And in the following
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year
, while the
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number
of
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books
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men
finished reading increased by one-third, it increased by 5 thousand for
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women
, exactly twice as
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many
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books
as the figure for
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men
.

It is worth noticing that
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women
and
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men
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read
the same
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number
of
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books
(10, 000) in the
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year
2013, as
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men
's interest in
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books
skyrocketed.
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Women
also
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read
more
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books
this
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year
than in 2012,
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but
the
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change
was less noticeable (exactly a quarter).
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, the figure for
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men
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furtherly
surged to 14 thousand
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books
in 2014,
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but
there was a fall regarding the reading habits of
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women
, as the
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number
of
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books
went down to 7 thousand.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. v. 2

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