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The bar charts show the various activities in the evening and how they often do between 1980 and 2010 v.2

The bar charts show the various activities in the evening and how they often do between 1980 and 2010 v. 2
The bar charts give the information on the different activities of people in the evening and the frequency of the activities per month. Generally, the over 50 aged group spent their most time for visiting their family and friends while the online at home covered as the least activity that people enjoyed. Taking a closer look on the bar chart 1980, the over 50 years group set aside their time for family and friends was about 10 times a month more than other groups and eating out were occupied at second place. The group of age from 15-25 years and 25-40 aged group showed the similar patterns that they both loved going to the cinema and go shopping and they went there for about more than 2 times and 3 times respectively. Turning to 2010, it showed the different trend. The online at home became the most attractive activity and they did not often go for a visit.
The bar charts give the information on the
different
activities
of
people
in the evening and the frequency of the
activities
per month.

Generally
, the over 50 aged
group
spent their most
time
for visiting their family and friends while the online at home covered as the least
activity
that
people
enjoyed.

Taking a closer look on the bar chart 1980, the over 50 years
group
set aside their
time
for family and friends was about 10
times
a month more than other
groups
and eating out
were occupied
at second place. The
group
of age from 15-25 years and 25-40 aged
group
showed
the similar patterns that they both
loved
going to the cinema and go
shopping and
they went there for about more than 2
times
and 3
times
respectively
.

Turning to 2010, it
showed
the
different
trend. The online at home became the most attractive
activity and
they did not
often
go for a visit.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar charts show the various activities in the evening and how they often do between 1980 and 2010 v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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