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the chart below shows three main causes of land damaged in four different areas. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

the chart below shows three main causes of land damaged in four different areas.
The graph illustrates the information about the crucial reason damaged land in four continents. It is clear that the harm of Africa and Asia is much more higher than Australia and Europe. The element causes the centrals disadvantaged is breeding. Africa lost 500 million hectares by breeding followed by free cutting affected 380 million hectares and then farming 300 million hectares. Different from other 3 three regions, free-cutting is the main reason lead Asia lose their land and farming harmed Asia area just less than free-cutting 10 million hectares. Australia and Europe both lose their land because of breeding, free-cutting and farming respectively. Breeding take 210 million hectares of land from Australia and 110 million hectares from Europe. Free-cutting take about 100 million hectares of both two continents. Europe is damaged 80 million hectares due to farming. The less affected by farming is Australia lose only about three a fifth million hectares
The graph illustrates the information about the crucial reason damaged
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land
in four continents. It is
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clear
that the harm of Africa and Asia is much
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more higher
than Australia and Europe. The element causes the centrals disadvantaged is breeding.

Africa lost 500
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million
hectares by breeding followed by free cutting
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affected
380
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million
hectares and then
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farming
300
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million
hectares.

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Different
from other 3 three regions, free-cutting is the main reason lead Asia lose their
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land
and
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farming
harmed Asia area
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just
less than free-cutting 10
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million
hectares. Australia and Europe both lose their
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land
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because
of breeding, free-cutting and
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farming
respectively
. Breeding take 210
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million
hectares of
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land
from Australia and 110
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million
hectares from Europe. Free-cutting take about 100
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million
hectares of both two continents. Europe
is damaged
80
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million
hectares due to
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farming
. The less
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affected
by
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farming
is Australia lose
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only
about three a fifth
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million
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hectares
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic the chart below shows three main causes of land damaged in four different areas.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
151 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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