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The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010 Summaries the information by selecting and report in the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.6

The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010
This bar graph illustrates the percentage of males indulging in senior development in three companies from 1980 to 2010. The following essay examines the trends briefly explain masculine involvement in the given field. In the overview, the participation of men in the given field corresponding to IBM has been exponentially increasing. whereas that of Microsoft rose gradually till 2000 and suddenly raced high at the end. Apple has shown fluctuating and comparatively low progress in this regard. Parsing the hike patterns of individual companies, IBM experienced poor masculine enrollment from 1980 to 1985 but later picked up drastically and almost doubled from 30 to about 60 percent between 2000 to 2010, being the highest among the three companies. Microsoft, on the other hand, has seen mild step-up in this sector over the years 1980 to 2000 but took an enormous leap of almost 20 percent in the final decade. while apple with respect to this issue dominated the rest at the start and fell low during 1980 to 1990 but later picked up a little bit eventually ending as the least of all.
This bar graph illustrates the percentage of males indulging in senior development in three
companies
from 1980 to 2010. The following essay examines the trends
briefly
explain
masculine involvement in the
given
field.

In the overview, the participation of
men
in the
given
field corresponding to IBM has been
exponentially
increasing.
whereas
that of Microsoft rose
gradually
till 2000 and
suddenly
raced high at the
end
. Apple has shown fluctuating and
comparatively
low progress in this regard.

Parsing the hike patterns of individual
companies
, IBM experienced poor masculine enrollment from 1980 to 1985
but
later picked up
drastically
and almost doubled from 30 to about 60 percent
between 2000 to 2010
, being the highest among the three
companies
. Microsoft,
on the other hand
, has
seen
mild step-up in this sector over the years 1980 to 2000
but
took an enormous leap of almost 20 percent in the final decade.
while
apple with respect to this issue dominated the rest at the
start
and fell low during 1980 to 1990
but
later picked up a
little bit
eventually
ending as the least of all.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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