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The chart below shows the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 and 2008. v.2

The chart below shows the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 and 2008. v. 2
The line graph gives information about the percentage of people who are unemployed and the number of people who left Ireland between 1988 and 2008. Overall, the unemployment rate had a decreasing trend in the 1988-2008 period. Although the number of people leaving Ireland had a sharp decrease in the 1988-2002 period, the figure had a strong growth from 2002 to 2008. The proportion of unemployed citizens increased to nearly 15% in 1992 after a decreasing trend from nearly 17% at the starting point to 11% in 1990. However, the unemployment rate rapidly dropped to 5% in 2000 and increase slightly to 6% during the 2000-2008 period. After fluctuations in the 1988 – 2002 period, the number of residents who left Ireland was approximately 25000 in 2002, compared to around 60000 at the starting point in 1988. In contrast, people in Ireland witnessed a rapid increasing trend of the number of people leaving the country to around 50000 in 2008.
The line graph gives information about the percentage of
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number
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Ireland between 1988 and 2008.

Overall
, the unemployment rate had a decreasing trend in the 1988-2008 period. Although the
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number
of
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people
leaving Ireland had a sharp decrease in the 1988-2002 period, the figure had a strong growth from 2002 to 2008.

The proportion of unemployed citizens increased to
nearly
15% in 1992 after a decreasing trend from
nearly
17% at the starting point to 11% in 1990.
However
, the unemployment rate
rapidly
dropped to 5% in 2000 and increase
slightly
to 6% during the 2000-2008 period.

After fluctuations in the 1988 – 2002 period, the
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number
of residents who
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left
Ireland was approximately 25000 in 2002, compared to around 60000 at the starting point in 1988.
In contrast
,
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people
in Ireland witnessed a rapid increasing trend of the
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number
of
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people
leaving the country to around 50000 in 2008.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 and 2008. v. 2

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160 words
6.5
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