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the chart below shows the total of volume of telephone calls ( in million minutes) in Denmark, devided into three categories, from 1995 to 2004 v.2

the chart below shows the total of volume of telephone calls ( in million minutes) in Denmark, devided into three categories, from 1995 to 2004 v. 2
The presented line chart provides the number of telephone calls which were calculated in million minutes in Denmark during nine years and it were also divided into 3 groups, namely national landline, international landline and mobile. In general, there are different trends in 3 categories. While the total of telephone calls by international landline and mobile increased, one by national landline decreased comparing to the first year. Firstly, in 1995, national landline’s telephone calls accounted for 12 million minutes, more than 11 million minutes mobile’s telephone calls. From 1995 to 2000, both of Denmark’s telephone calls by national landline and mobile experienced a moderate rise, at above 16 and 3 million minutes respectively. After that, there were a slight drop in the number of telephone calls by national landline, at 15 million minutes in 2002. By contrast, that of by mobile shooted tremendously up 6 million minutes. In the last three years, while the total of mobile’s telephone calls reached at peak 20 million minutes, the time which people use national landline to call decline huge to under 10 million minutes. In term of the number of time people use international landline to communicate, it made up 6 million minutes in 1995. Then, having climbed slightly during 9 years and stood at 8 million mintutes in 2004.
The presented line chart provides the number of
telephone
calls
which
were calculated
in
million
minutes in Denmark during nine years and it were
also
divided into 3 groups,
namely
national
landline, international landline and mobile.

In general
, there are
different
trends in 3 categories. While the total of
telephone
calls
by international landline and mobile increased, one by
national
landline decreased comparing to the
first
year.

Firstly
, in 1995,
national
landline’s
telephone
calls
accounted for 12
million
minutes, more than 11
million
minutes mobile’s
telephone
calls
. From 1995 to 2000, both of Denmark’s
telephone
calls
by
national
landline and mobile experienced a moderate rise, at above 16 and 3
million
minutes
respectively
. After that, there were a slight drop in the number of
telephone
calls
by
national
landline, at 15
million
minutes in 2002. By contrast, that of by mobile
shooted
tremendously
up 6
million
minutes. In the last three years, while the total of mobile’s
telephone
calls
reached at peak 20
million
minutes, the time which
people
use
national
landline to
call
decline huge to under 10
million
minutes.

In term of the number of time
people
use
international landline to communicate, it made up 6
million
minutes in 1995. Then, having climbed
slightly
during 9 years and stood at 8
million
mintutes
in 2004.
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IELTS academic the chart below shows the total of volume of telephone calls ( in million minutes) in Denmark, devided into three categories, from 1995 to 2004 v. 2

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