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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia.
A glance at the bar chart reveals the percentage of various Australians visited zoo, library, theatre, and cinema. Ostensibly, the new migrants born in English-speaking territories have visited zoo 10 percent more than the people born in Australia and 23 percent more than the new migrants born in other countries. Moreover, the statistics indicate that cinema was the most popular location visited by diverse individuals. Surprisingly, the theatre was the place which was almost rarely visited by folks. The indices for people born in Australia and the new migrants born in other countries are 20 percent and 10 percent, respectively. In addition, the rate for the new migrants born in other countries who visited the zoo is approximately double compared to those who chose theatre to visit. Noticeably, only 20 percent of people who were born in Australia visited library whilst the percentage for the similar range of visitors for cinema was three times more. Overall, the information exposes the distinctive locations visited by different residents of Australia
A glance at the bar chart reveals the percentage of various Australians
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zoo, library,
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theatre
, and cinema.

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, the
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born in English-speaking territories have
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visited
zoo 10
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percent
more than the
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born in Australia and 23
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more than the
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born in other countries.
Moreover
, the statistics indicate that cinema was the most popular location
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visited
by diverse individuals.
Surprisingly
, the
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theatre
was the place which was almost rarely
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by folks. The indices for
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people
born in Australia and the
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migrants
born in other countries are 20
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and 10
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,
respectively
.
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, the rate for the
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migrants
born in other countries who
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the zoo is approximately double compared to those who chose
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theatre
to visit.
Noticeably
,
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20
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library whilst the percentage for the similar range of visitors for cinema was three times more.

Overall
, the information exposes the distinctive locations
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by
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residents of Australia
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
167 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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