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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v.3

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 3
The bar chart outlines the duration of phone calls by the UK residents from 1995 to 2002. Generally speaking, most of the UK citizens made local calls during the period and the usage of cell phones rapidly increased. According to the bar chart, initially in 1995, British talked more than 70 billion minutes on fixed-lines while 37 billion minutes were national and international fixed line calls. Only 3 billion minutes were spent by people to talk over cell phone calls. The use of local fixed-line increased steadily until 1999 when it reached to 90 billion minutes and after that, the number decreased each year and finally reached to 72 billion in 2002. The national & international-fixed dialling increased each year and reached to 61 billion in 2002 from the initial figure of 38 billion. Finally, the number of cell phone calls expanded significantly each year which shows its increasing popularity. In 1995, the mobile phone calls were only 2 billion minutes and in 2000 it reached to approximately 25 billion minutes. Over the next 2 years, this number increased to 45 billion. In summary, mobile phone calls gained a significant popularity among the UK callers and as of 2002, the local fixed-line calling was still the highest in the UK.
The bar chart outlines the duration of
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by the UK residents from 1995 to 2002.
Generally
speaking, most of the UK citizens made local
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calls
during the period and the usage of cell
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phones
rapidly
increased.

According to the bar chart,
initially
in 1995, British talked more than 70
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billion
minutes on
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fixed
-lines while 37
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billion
minutes were national and international
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fixed
line
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calls
.
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Only
3
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billion
minutes
were spent
by
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people
to talk over cell
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phone
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calls
. The
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use
of local
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fixed
-line increased
steadily
until 1999 when it
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reached
to 90
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billion
minutes and after that, the number decreased each
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year
and
finally
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reached
to 72
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billion
in 2002.

The national & international-
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fixed
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dialling
increased each
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year
and
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reached
to 61
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billion
in 2002 from the initial figure of 38
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billion
.
Finally
, the number of cell
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phone
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calls
expanded
significantly
each
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year
which
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shows
its increasing popularity. In 1995, the mobile
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phone
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calls
were
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only
2
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billion
minutes and in 2000 it
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reached
to approximately 25
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billion
minutes. Over the
next
2 years, this number increased to 45 billion.

In summary, mobile
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phone
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calls
gained a significant popularity among the UK callers and as of 2002, the local
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fixed
-line calling was
still
the highest in the UK.
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29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 3

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4 paragraphs
210 words
6.5
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