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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v.2

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 2
The bar chart outlines the duration of local, national & international and mobile phone calls in the UK between 1995 and 2002. Overall, British citizens talked over the local land-lines the most and mobile phone gained a huge popularity over the time. Initially, in 1995, British residents talked over 70 million minutes using local-fixed lines and their conversation duration on the national and international fixed-lines was almost half of that. They spoke only 5 million minutes on cell phones. The communication span via local-fixed lines was the highest in 1999 when it accounted for 90 million minutes. At that time, their national and international landline communication amounted 50 million minutes and they talked over 10 million minutes on the cell phones. It is evident that the total number of phone conversation using the local lines increased till 1999 and then kept on declining while a steady growth was evident for national and international fixed line calls. During 2001, British people spoke around 60 million minutes on national and international land-lines while the use of mobile phone was on the hike, around 50 million minutes conversation was made by cell phones.
The bar chart outlines the duration of local,
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national
&
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international
and mobile
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phone
calls in the UK between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
, British citizens talked
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over
the local land-lines the most and mobile
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phone
gained a huge popularity
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over
the time.

Initially
, in 1995, British residents talked
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over
70
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million
minutes using local-
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fixed
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lines
and their conversation duration on the
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national
and
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international
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fixed
-lines was almost half of that. They spoke
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only
5
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million
minutes on cell
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phones
. The communication span via local-
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fixed
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lines
was the highest in 1999 when it accounted for 90
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million
minutes. At that time, their
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national
and
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international
landline communication amounted 50
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million
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minutes and
they talked
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over
10
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million
minutes on the cell
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phones
. It is evident that the total number of
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phone
conversation using the local
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lines
increased till 1999 and then
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kept
on declining while a steady growth was evident for
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national
and
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international
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fixed
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line
calls. During 2001, British
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people
spoke around 60
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million
minutes on
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national
and
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international
land-lines while the
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use
of mobile
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phone
was on the hike, around 50
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million
minutes conversation
was made
by cell
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phones
.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 2

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