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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v.6

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 6
The bar chart illustrates annual duration of phone calls (in billion minutes) made by British people in three different categories between 1995 and 2005. In general, local fixed-line was the most popular type of telephone used by people living in the UK over the period and cell phone gained its popularity steadily. More than 70 billion minutes were utilised by United Kingdom’s citizens to communicate each other through local fixed-line over those years and that was the highest total number of minutes talked. The use of local fixed-line reached a peak in 1999, at 90 billion minutes before falling by around 18 billion minutes in the next three years. On the other hand, although the minutes of mobile phones were not as many as those of national and international - fixed line, this type of communication had upward trends over the time. While national and international - fixed line started roughly 38 billion minutes and then increased by approximately 22 billion at the end of the year, cell phones had about 3 billion minutes in 1995 and then rose significantly until reaching a peak to just under 50 billion in 2002.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. v. 6

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