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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. v.4

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. v. 4
The map illustrates the changes on an island after the construction of some tourist facilities. Generally speaking, the island was deserted as no tourists facility was there, but after the renovation, tourist amenities like the pier, restaurant, several accommodations, reception on the island, roads etc. made it tourists friendly. The first map shows nothing on the island except some trees but the second map illustrates the changes after the construction of facilities. A pier for the boats to land could be seen and from there, a vehicle track leads to the reception area and then the restaurant. Vehicle track ends near the restaurant and the footpath leads tourists to the accommodation areas and to the beach. Residential areas are located on both sides of the reception with footpath connecting them. It is worth noticing that no woodcutting took place as trees are present in both maps. On the left side of the reception, the residential area is connected to the beach via the footpath. Swimming facility is available there as well. To summarise, the map summarises that a deserted island had been turned into a tourist spot for the recreation and amusement of people without destroying natural beauty.
The
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map
illustrates the
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changes
on an
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island
after the construction of
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some
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tourist
facilities.
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speaking, the
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island
was deserted
as no
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tourists
facility was there,
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after the renovation,
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tourist
amenities like the pier, restaurant, several accommodations,
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reception
on the
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island
, roads etc. made it
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tourists
friendly.

The
first
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map
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shows
nothing on the
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island
except
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some
trees
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but
the second
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map
illustrates the
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changes
after the construction of facilities. A pier for the boats to land could be
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seen
and from there, a vehicle
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track
leads to the
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reception
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area
and then the restaurant. Vehicle
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track
ends near the restaurant and the footpath leads
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tourists
to the accommodation
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areas
and to the beach. Residential
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areas
are located
on both sides of the
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reception
with footpath connecting them.

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maps
. On the
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left
side of the
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reception
, the residential
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area
is connected
to the beach via the footpath. Swimming facility is available there
as well
.

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summarise
, the
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map
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summarises
that a deserted
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island
had
been turned
into a
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tourist
spot for the recreation and amusement of
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people
without destroying natural beauty.
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IELTS academic The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. v. 4

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4 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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