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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. v.5

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. v. 5
The given maps portray the changes that took place on an island after the construction of certain tourist facilities. According to the maps, we can immediately see that there are many establishments on the island for recreations now but those were not present on the old map. First, a pier was constructed so that people can visit this island by boat. Second, lots of accommodations were built around the trees and those trees were kept intact. A reception was built in the middle of all accommodations, and a new restaurant is now located behind the reception. Third, on the left corner of the island, people can now go for swimming near the beach. The swimming area was designed for visitors. Last but not least, travellers can now walk around the island on the footpath. Meanwhile, vehicle tracks have connected the pier to the reception and ended at the restaurant. In summary, many tourist facilities were built on the island for the entertainment and tourist facilities without sacrificing trees.
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changes
that took place on an
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island
after the construction of certain tourist facilities. According to the maps, we can immediately
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see
that there are
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many
establishments on the
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island
for recreations
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now
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but
those were not present on the
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old
map.

First
, a pier
was constructed
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so
that
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people
can visit this
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island
by boat. Second, lots of accommodations
were built
around the trees and those trees were
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kept
intact. A reception
was built
in the middle of all accommodations, and a new restaurant is
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now
located behind the reception. Third, on the
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left
corner of the
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island
,
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people
can
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now
go for swimming near the beach. The swimming area
was designed
for visitors. Last
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but
not least,
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travellers
can
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now
walk around the
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island
on the footpath. Meanwhile, vehicle
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tracks
have connected the pier to the reception and ended at the restaurant.

In summary,
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many
tourist facilities
were built
on the
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island
for the entertainment and tourist facilities without sacrificing trees.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. v. 5

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3 paragraphs
168 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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