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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. v.6

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. v. 6
The two maps illustrate the changes on an island due to the constructions and adaptations made for the tourism activities. In general, the island became more crowded with entertainment facilities after the introduction of tourism. In the first picture before the construction of tourist facilities, there was no accommodation and the whole island had almost nothing except few trees. Furthermore, the area was completely calm and quiet. However, turning to the second picture, this island provides a lot of accommodation facilities and a large restaurant. Reception block is located close to the restaurant and these buildings are linked through vehicle tracks. From the reception centre, people can go to the pier through the vehicle track. Moreover, the swimming area is also available near the beach for visiting tourists. Tourists can walk on the footpath to reach the beach from their cottages. Overall, tourism facilities made greater development on this island, while it became congested. However, it is good no notice that trees were not chopped down during the renovation works.
The two maps illustrate the
changes
on an
island
due to the constructions and adaptations made for the tourism activities.
In general
, the
island
became more crowded with entertainment facilities after the introduction of tourism.

In the
first
picture
before
the construction of tourist facilities, there was no accommodation and the whole
island
had almost nothing except few trees.
Furthermore
, the area was completely calm and quiet.

However
, turning to the second picture, this
island
provides
a lot of
accommodation facilities and a large restaurant. Reception block
is located
close to the restaurant and these buildings
are linked
through vehicle
tracks
. From the reception
centre
,
people
can go to the pier through the vehicle
track
.
Moreover
, the swimming area is
also
available near the beach for visiting tourists. Tourists can walk on the footpath to reach the beach from their cottages.

Overall
, tourism facilities made greater development on this
island
, while it became congested.
However
, it is
good
no notice that trees were not chopped down during the renovation works.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. v. 6

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
170 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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