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The chart below shows the results of a survey that sampled a cross section of travelers at a major metropolitan airport about the purpose of their trip. The survey was carried out during four different months in 2002. v.1

The chart below shows the results of a survey that sampled a cross section of travelers at a major metropolitan airport about the purpose of their trip. The survey was carried out during four different months in 2002. v. 1
The table gives data on the main reasons for travel according to a survey that was conducted in a major airport in four different months in 2002. A glance at the table reveals that most of the people travelled either because of their business need or for holidays and the highest percentage of people went to visit family during December. Getting back to the details, almost two-third of the travelers took the tour in March 2002 for their business purposes while remaining one-third travelled for visiting their family, for holidays or for other reasons. A contrasting scenario could be observed during June 2002 when more than half of the travelers moved to enjoy their holidays while only 29% of them travelled for business purposes. Visiting family and other purposes contributed to the remaining 17% tours by those people. During the September 2002, holiday makers dropped to 31% while businessmen travelled more. In this month family visiting contributed to 11% tour in the airport. Finally, in December 2002, a similar percentage of people travelled to make business trips and to enjoy holidays. The highest percentages of people moved to visit family in this month and that was slightly more than one-fourth of the travelers.
The table gives data on the main reasons for travel according to a survey that
was conducted
in a major airport in four
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different
months in 2002. A glance at the table reveals that most of the
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people
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travelled
either
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because
of their
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business
need or for
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holidays
and the highest percentage of
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people
went to visit
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family
during December.

Getting back to the
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details
, almost two-third of the travelers took the tour in March 2002 for their
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business
purposes while remaining one-third
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travelled
for visiting their
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family
, for
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holidays
or for other reasons. A contrasting scenario could
be observed
during June 2002 when more than half of the travelers
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moved
to enjoy their
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holidays
while
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only
29% of them
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travelled
for
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business
purposes. Visiting
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family
and other purposes contributed to the remaining 17% tours by those
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people
. During the September 2002,
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holiday
makers dropped to 31% while businessmen
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travelled
more. In this month
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family
visiting contributed to 11% tour in the airport.
Finally
, in December 2002, a similar percentage of
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people
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travelled
to
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make
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business
trips and to enjoy
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holidays
. The highest percentages of
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people
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moved
to visit
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family
in this month and that was
slightly
more than one-fourth of the travelers.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the results of a survey that sampled a cross section of travelers at a major metropolitan airport about the purpose of their trip. The survey was carried out during four different months in 2002. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
203 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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