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The chart below displays the shares of expenditure on selected categories in the United States, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. v.2

The chart below displays the shares of expenditure on selected categories in the United States, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. v. 2
The bar graph shows the percentage of money spent on food, housing, transportation, health care and clothing in four different countries in 2009. Overall, all countries spent the highest percentage on housing except for Japan who spent the most on food. While Canada and the UK were shown to spend less on health care, America' s smallest expenditure was on clothing and Japan' s lowest percentage was evenly split between both of these categories. The USA spent the highest proportion of money on housing at just over a quarter, likewise, for Canada and the UK at approximately 20% and just under 25% respectively. Japan allocated the highest percentage of expenditure on food at roughly 23% compared to other countries. With regard to transportation, Canada' s expenditure was a fifth, which was the biggest overall. Both Canadians and British spent the least on health care at nearly 4% and roughly 1% respectively, and in the United States of America, it was attributed to clothing at about 5%. Japanese smallest proportion of expenditure was equally spent on both of these items at around 5%.
The bar graph
shows
the
percentage
of money
spent
on food, housing, transportation, health care and clothing in four
different
countries in 2009.

Overall
, all countries
spent
the highest
percentage
on housing
except for
Japan who
spent
the most on food. While Canada and the UK
were shown
to spend less on health care,
America&
#039; s smallest
expenditure
was on clothing and
Japan&
#039; s lowest
percentage
was
evenly
split between both of these categories.

The USA
spent
the highest proportion of money on housing at
just
over a quarter,
likewise
, for Canada and the UK at approximately 20% and
just
under 25%
respectively
. Japan allocated the highest
percentage
of
expenditure
on food at roughly 23% compared to other countries. With regard to transportation,
Canada&
#039; s
expenditure
was a fifth, which was the biggest
overall
.

Both Canadians and British
spent
the least on health care at
nearly
4% and roughly 1%
respectively
, and in the United States of America, it
was attributed
to clothing at about 5%. Japanese smallest proportion of
expenditure
was
equally
spent
on both of these items at around 5%.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below displays the shares of expenditure on selected categories in the United States, Canada, the UK and Japan in 2009. v. 2

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