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The chart below shows the percentage of total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000. v. 1

The column graph summarises the percentages of elderly citizens in the USA who were above 64 years old between 1900 and 2000 based on the U. S. Census Bureau's decennial census of population data. Generally speaking, the ratio of senior citizens in the USA increased significantly over the period, and 65 to 74 years old citizens were highest in percentage in terms of their ratio among the elderly Americans. According to the graph, four out of hundred Americans were above 64 years old in 1900 and the majority of them were between 65 to 74 years old at that time. Moreover, the ratio of people over 85 years old in this decade was very insignificant. After three decades, however, the elderly people’s ratio in the US reached over 5% and it kept on increasing until the end of the 20th century. Thus, almost one in ten US citizens was elderly in 1970 and 0. 7% of them were 85 years old. The growth of senior citizens further accelerated after 1980 in the USA. As a consequence, during the last two decades of the 20th century, the USA had been the home to 12% senior citizens and almost 4. 5% of them were between 75 to 84 years old and 1. 5% above 85 years old.

IELTS academic The chart below shows the percentage of total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000. v.1

The column graph
summarises
the percentages of
elderly
citizens
in the USA who were above 64 years
old
between 1900 and 2000 based on the U. S. Census Bureau's decennial census of population data.
Generally
speaking, the
ratio
of senior
citizens
in the USA increased
significantly
over the period, and 65 to 74 years
old
citizens
were highest in percentage in terms of their
ratio
among the
elderly
Americans. According to the graph, four out of hundred Americans were above 64 years
old
in 1900 and the majority of them were
between 65 to 74
years
old
at that time.
Moreover
, the
ratio
of
people
over 85 years
old
in this decade was
very
insignificant. After three decades,
however
, the
elderly
people
’s
ratio
in the US reached over 5% and it
kept
on increasing until the
end
of the 20th century.
Thus
, almost one in ten US
citizens
was
elderly
in 1970 and 0. 7% of them were 85 years
old
. The growth of senior
citizens
further
accelerated after 1980 in the USA. As a consequence, during the last two decades of the 20th century, the USA had been the home to 12% senior
citizens
and almost 4. 5% of them were
between 75 to 84
years
old
and 1. 5% above 85 years
old
.
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