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The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009. v.1

The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009. v. 1
The pie charts delineate how citizens in a European city commuted to and from their offices in 1959 and 2009. Overall, more than half of the office-goers walked in 1959 while car use in 2009 significantly increased. Besides, people travelled more distance in 2009 at a faster speed. According to the illustration, more than half of the job holders walked to reach their office and get back home in 1959 while only a quarter of them did so in 2009. Bus commuters in this city accounted for 15% in 1959 while it was 2% less after 5 decades. The ratio of office executives (15%) who used trains in both years remained the same. One in ten office commuters drove cars in 1959 but after five decades their percentage increased significantly, 35% to be exact. The use of different other transportations in 2009 increased than that of 50 years earlier. It is worth noticing that the speed and average distance travelled by these commuters considerably increased in 2009 when a commuter travelled 19 kilometres on an average in 42 minutes compared to their average 3. 5-kilometre journey in 17 minutes in 1959.
The pie charts delineate how citizens in a European city commuted to and from their
offices
in 1959 and 2009.
Overall
, more than half of the office-goers walked in 1959 while car
use
in 2009
significantly
increased
.
Besides
,
people
travelled more distance in 2009 at a faster speed.

According to the illustration, more than half of the job holders walked to reach their
office
and
get
back home in 1959 while
only
a quarter of them did
so
in 2009. Bus
commuters
in this city accounted for 15% in 1959 while it was 2% less after 5 decades. The ratio of
office
executives (15%) who
used
trains in both years remained the same. One in ten
office
commuters
drove cars in 1959
but
after five decades their percentage
increased
significantly
, 35% to be exact. The
use
of
different
other transportations in 2009
increased
than that of 50 years earlier.

It is worth noticing that the speed and average distance travelled by these
commuters
considerably
increased
in 2009 when a
commuter
travelled 19
kilometres
on an average in 42 minutes compared to their average 3.
5-kilometre
journey in 17 minutes in 1959.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show how people in a European city reached their office and got back home in 1959 and 2009. v. 1

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