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The graph below shows the figures for population distribution in the Northwest Region for 1900-2050. v.1

The graph below shows the figures for population distribution in the Northwest Region for 1900-2050. v. 1
The bar graph shows the percentages of rural, suburban and urban populations in Northwest region in four different years including the projection of population distribution in 2050. Overall, the percentage of the village-living population rapidly decreased over the time and a great percentage of people will live in city areas in Northwest region in the future. According to the given column graph, more than six out of ten persons in Northwest region in 1900 lived in rural areas while one out of ten lived in suburban areas. The percentage of urban area’s population was around 35 in this same year. After 5 decades, the population circulation in this region greatly changed and more than half of the population started living in urban and suburban areas. In the year 2000, six out of ten people in this region lived in urban areas while the remaining four were in urban and rural areas. According to the projection in 2050, more than half of the North-western population will live in suburban areas while only 10% will remain in the village area. The remaining 35% of its population would settle in urban areas.
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and
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populations
in Northwest
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region
in four
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different
years including the projection of
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population
distribution in 2050.
Overall
, the
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percentage
of the village-living
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population
rapidly
decreased over the time and a great
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percentage
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people
will
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live
in city
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areas
in Northwest
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region
in the future.

According to the
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column graph, more than six out of ten persons in Northwest
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region
in 1900
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lived
in rural
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areas
while one out of ten
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lived
in
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suburban
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areas
. The
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of
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urban
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area’s
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population
was around 35 in this same year. After 5 decades, the
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population
circulation in this
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region
greatly
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changed
and more than half of the
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population
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started
living in
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urban
and
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suburban
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areas
. In the year 2000, six out of ten
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people
in this
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region
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lived
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while the remaining four were in
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urban
and rural
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areas
. According to the projection in 2050, more than half of the North-western
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population
will
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live
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suburban
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while
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only
10% will remain in the village
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area
. The remaining 35% of its
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population
would settle in
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urban
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areas
.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the figures for population distribution in the Northwest Region for 1900-2050. v. 1

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