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The chart below shows the percentage of people who are five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the U. K from 2001 to 2008. v.2

The chart below shows the percentage of people who are five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the U. K from 2001 to 2008. v. 2
The column chart illustrates the information about the comparison that the number of male, female and pupils who are the fruits and vegetables each day in the U. K between 2001 and 2008. A quick look on graph is enough to make it clear that the proportion of women who were more like to eat in the both food items rather than men and children did not prefer to eat the fruits and vegetables per day, over the given period of time. To commence with, in initially year, it was seems to be very ordinary that in the U. K the gender of female consumed more food, which was the most highest about 22% in 2001. Surprisingly, in the next five years the figure for consuming a couple of products each day considerably had increased slightly accounting for 32% and which was reach to peak point by 2006. But, in 2001 to 2003, male and pupils were show to the equal interest on fruits and vegetables per day selling product approximately 18%. Moving to further, in the next three years, the gender of men and children preferred eat the fruits and vegetables each day which was 23% of pupils and 28% of male, respectively. Finally, in the last year the figure for the women, men and children started decrease to 28%, 25% and 23% by 2008.
The column chart illustrates the information about the comparison that the number of male, female and pupils who are the
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each day in the U. K between 2001 and 2008.

A quick look on graph is
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that the proportion of women who were more like to eat in the both food items
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men
and children did not prefer to eat the
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fruits
and
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vegetables
per day, over the
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given
period of time.

To commence with, in
initially
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year
, it was seems to be
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very
ordinary that in the U. K the gender of female consumed more food, which was the
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most highest
about 22% in 2001.
Surprisingly
, in the
next
five years the figure for consuming a couple of products each day
considerably
had increased
slightly
accounting for 32% and which was reach to peak point by 2006.
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But
, in 2001 to 2003, male and pupils were
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show
to the equal interest on
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fruits
and
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vegetables
per day selling product approximately 18%.

Moving to
further
, in the
next
three years, the gender of
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men
and children preferred eat the
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fruits
and
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vegetables
each day which was 23% of pupils and 28% of male,
respectively
.
Finally
, in the last
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year
the figure for the women,
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men
and children
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started
decrease to 28%, 25% and 23% by 2008.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the percentage of people who are five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the U. K from 2001 to 2008. v. 2

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226 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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