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The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. v.3

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. v. 3
The proportions of research students, both male and female, who were studying in six different science courses at a UK university in 2009 are revealed in the form of bar chart. All in all, the proportions of male research students in Physics, Astronomy and Geology were much higher than the female research students while more female were engaged in Veterinary Medicine than that of males. Looking at the detail it is clear that the number of male students was always more than the women, except in the research class of Veterinary Medicine. The gap between the number of male and female students is most visible in Physics subject in which there were more than 200 male students against the only 40 female students. Interestingly, the numbers of women students who took Veterinary Medicine was higher than the men, nonetheless. In this faculty, the proportion of men scholars was nearly a hundred, just a couple of tens less than the women. The Highest number of research students were in Biology while the lowest number of that students could be observed in Veterinary Medicine. In summary, female research students in the UK in 2009 preferred Biology, Medicine and Veterinary Medicine while male research students mostly preferred Biology, Physics, and Medicine.
The proportions of
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, both male and
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, who were studying in six
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science courses at a UK university in 2009
are revealed
in the form of bar chart. All in all, the proportions of male
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research
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students
in Physics, Astronomy and Geology were much higher than the
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female
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research
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students
while more
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were engaged
in Veterinary
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Medicine
than that of males.

Looking at the detail it is
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clear
that the
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of male
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was always more than the women, except in the
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class
of Veterinary
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. The gap between the
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of male and
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is most visible in Physics subject in which there were more than 200 male
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against the
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only
40
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.
Interestingly
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of women
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who took Veterinary
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Medicine
was higher than the
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, nonetheless. In this faculty, the proportion of
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scholars was
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a couple of tens less than the women. The Highest
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of
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students
were in Biology while the lowest
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could
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in Veterinary Medicine.

In summary,
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female
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in the UK in 2009 preferred Biology,
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Medicine
and Veterinary
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Medicine
while male
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students
mostly
preferred Biology, Physics, and
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Medicine
.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. v. 3

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