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The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, 2010. v.1

The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, 2010. v. 1
The provided pie charts compare four different degrees that were awarded to the students at the National University in three decades, commencing from 1990. As can be seen, more students were granted Computer Science degrees while Business graduates decreased over the time. The illustration indicates that both Business and Computer Science diplomas were achieved by 30% students in 1990 at the National University. The remaining 40% diplomas went to Medicine and Law graduates with a ration of 5: 3. After 10 years, the National University handed over 40% degrees to Computer Science students and 30% to Medicine students. Total students who achieved Business degrees in this year reduced by 10% while it was a 5% drop for the Law graduates. Finally, in 2000, the percentage of Computer Science graduates climbed to 45% in this institution. One-fourth diplomas were given to the Medicine students in this same year while the remaining 30% graduates were from the Business and Law departments with 15% from each faculty. In summary, more degrees were awarded to the Computer Science graduates in the National University and there was a significant decrease in the number of Business graduates in 2000.
The provided pie charts compare four
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decreased over the time.

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. The remaining 40% diplomas went to Medicine and Law
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with a ration of 5: 3. After 10 years, the
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handed over 40%
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to Computer
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and 30% to Medicine
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, in 2000, the percentage of Computer
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climbed to 45% in this institution. One-fourth diplomas were
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in this same year while the remaining 30%
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and Law departments with 15% from each faculty.

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and there was a significant decrease in the number of
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in 2000.
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IELTS academic The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, 2010. v. 1

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