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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. v.2

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. v. 2
The provided pie charts compare the domestic, agricultural and industrial water consumptions in six major parts of the world. In general, the highest percentage of water is utilised for agricultural purposes in Asian, African and South American countries while about half of the water in Europe and North America goes to industrial sectors. As can be seen from the given pie charts, North America's water consumption has a striking similarity to that of Europe. In both of these continents, about half of the water is required in industrial sectors, almost one-third for crop cultivation and 13-15% for people’s household use. Interestingly, South American’s water-absorbing habit is quite contrary to the North American region and it is more like the water consumptions in Asian and African continents. A great portion of water goes to agricultural division in Asian, African and North American countries which is over eight-tenths of their total consumption. The highest water consumption is cultivation could be observed in Central Asia (88%) which is almost treble than that of Europe. Household water use in South America is higher than other parts of the world and that stands at 19%. Only 7 to 9 percent water is used by people in Asian and African countries for their personal use at home.   Finally, the industrial water consumptions in Asian and African areas ranges from 5% to 12% and this ration is quite lower than that of Europe and North America. Interestingly, South East Asia uses more water for manufacturing than each of Africa, central Asia and South America.
The provided pie charts compare the domestic, agricultural and
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consumptions
in six major parts of the world.
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, the highest percentage of
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for agricultural purposes in Asian, African and South American countries while about half of the
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in Europe and
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America goes to
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pie charts,
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America's
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has a striking similarity to that of Europe. In both of these continents, about half of the
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is required
in
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sectors, almost one-third for crop cultivation and 13-15% for
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’s household
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.
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, South American’s water-absorbing habit is quite contrary to the
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American region and it is more like the
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consumptions
in Asian and African continents. A great portion of
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goes to agricultural division in Asian, African and
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North
American countries which is over eight-tenths of their total
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consumption
. The highest
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is cultivation could
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in Central Asia (88%) which is almost
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than that of Europe. Household
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in South America is higher than other parts of the world and that stands at 19%.
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7 to 9 percent
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is
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in Asian and African countries for their personal
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at home.
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Finally
, the
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consumptions
in Asian and African areas ranges from 5% to 12% and this ration is quite lower than that of Europe and
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, South East Asia
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for manufacturing than each of Africa,
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central Asia
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IELTS academic The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. v. 2

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