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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. v.4

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. v. 4
The column chart reveals three challenges that three age groups face when they start living in other countries. Overall, we can see that there is a significantly different level of difficulties between age groups meet. Regarding the chart, people who are 18-34-year-olds mostly face the problem of making a friend, while people aged over 55-year-old mainly suffer the problem of learning the local language. Looking at the chart, making friend accounts for the highest percent of the difficulties to the youngest age group when residing new countries, at 46% compared to 35% of people aged 35-54-year-old and 23% of the eldest age group, respectively. Similarly, 40% of people aged 18-54 encounter the problem of finding somewhere to live, while there is only 22% of over 55 year-olds meet this issue. In contrast, the most concerned problem for elder people over 55 is learning the local language, at 54%, while this issue is a minor concern for the people aged 18-34. On the other hand, 35% of 35-54 year-olds live hard to live because of this problem.
The column chart reveals three challenges that three
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different
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age
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groups
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meet
. Regarding the chart,
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people
who are 18-34-year-olds
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face the
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problem
of making a friend, while
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people
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aged
over 55-year-
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old
mainly
suffer the
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problem
of learning the local language.

Looking at the chart, making friend accounts for the highest percent of the difficulties to the youngest
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age
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group
when residing new countries, at 46% compared to 35% of
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people
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aged
35-54-year-
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old
and 23% of the eldest
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age
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group
,
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.
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, 40% of
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people
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aged
18-54 encounter the
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problem
of finding somewhere to
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live
, while there is
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22% of over 55 year-olds
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meet
this issue.

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problem
for elder
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people
over 55 is learning the local language, at 54%, while this issue is a minor concern for the
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people
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aged
18-34.
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, 35% of 35-54 year-olds
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live
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to
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because of this
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6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. v. 4

Academic
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3 paragraphs
176 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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