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The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035. v.2

The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035. v. 2
The bar chart depicts the proportion of people aged 65 and over in five countries in 1985 and a predicted change in this age group for 2035. Overall, the percentage of people aged 65-over in all countries increased and is predicted to rise over the period of 50 years. It is also clear that Wales had the highest number of people in the 65-over age group over the period as a whole. In 1985, Wales witnessed the highest percentage of people aged 65-over, at approximately 16%. The UK and England had the same figure and followed Wales, at 15% in each of both countries. On the other hand, Scotland and Northen Ireland had the lower figures, at around 14% and 12% respectively. In 2035, the number of people who are from 65 in all countries is projected to grow considerably. the highest percentage of 26% is seen in Wales. Scotland had the next-highest percentage of population aged 65-over, at 25%. Notably, the proportion of the three remaining countries is forecast to grow to the same point, at around 23%.
The bar chart depicts the proportion of
people
aged
65 and
over
in five
countries
in 1985 and a predicted
change
in this age group for 2035.
Overall
, the
percentage
of
people
aged
65-over
in all
countries
increased and
is predicted
to rise
over
the period of 50 years. It is
also
clear
that Wales had the highest number of
people
in the
65-over
age group
over
the period as a whole.

In 1985, Wales witnessed the highest
percentage
of
people
aged
65-over
, at approximately 16%. The UK and England had the same figure and followed Wales, at 15% in each of both
countries
.
On the other hand
, Scotland and
Northen
Ireland had the lower figures, at around 14% and 12%
respectively
.

In 2035, the number of
people
who are from 65 in all
countries
is projected
to grow
considerably
.
the
highest
percentage
of 26% is
seen
in Wales. Scotland had the
next
-highest
percentage
of population
aged
65-over
, at 25%.
Notably
, the proportion of the three remaining
countries
is forecast to grow to the same point, at around 23%.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035. v. 2

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