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The chart below shows the Higher Colleges of Technology graduates in the UAE. v.3

The chart below shows the Higher Colleges of Technology graduates in the UAE. v. 3
The provided bar graph compares the number of male and female students who were awarded honours in different colleges under the Higher Colleges of Technology in the UAE. As is observed from the graph, the number of female graduates is higher than that of male grads in the USA. According to the given bar chart, the number of female graduates from Al Ain college was 218 which was higher than that of male products from the same college. Second, the number of female graduates from the Abu Dhabi college was 293 while it was 273 for the male. The highest number of graduates could be observed in the Dubai college and among those graduates, there are 547 women and 426 men. A similar trend is also noticeable in the cases of Ras Al Khaimah and Sharjah colleges. These two colleges produced comparatively fewer graduates but women's ratio was higher than the male graduates' ratio. The overall data shows that the female graduates outnumbered the male graduates in the given colleges in the UAE.
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students who
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colleges under the Higher Colleges of Technology in the UAE. As
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from the graph, the
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female
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is higher than that of male grads in the USA.

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bar chart, the
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of
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female
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from Al Ain college was 218 which was higher than that of male products from the same college. Second, the
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number
of
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female
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from the Abu Dhabi college was 293 while it was 273 for the male. The highest
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number
of
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graduates
could
be observed
in the Dubai college and among those
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graduates
, there are 547 women and 426
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men
. A similar trend is
also
noticeable in the cases of
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Ras
Al
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Khaimah
and
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Sharjah
colleges. These two colleges produced
comparatively
fewer
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graduates
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but
women's ratio was higher than the male graduates' ratio. The
overall
data
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shows
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female
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graduates
outnumbered the male
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in the
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colleges in the UAE.

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IELTS academic The chart below shows the Higher Colleges of Technology graduates in the UAE. v. 3

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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