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The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. v.2

The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. v. 2
The pie charts compare Americans' expenditure in 7 different categories namely food, cars, petrol, restaurants, furniture, computers and books in 1966 with that of 1996. Overall, the least significant percentage of spending by Americans went on computers in 1966 while the food cost them the highest percentage. After three decades, cars became the largest segment of expenses by American residents and the smallest segment was spent on books, percentage-wise. Cars accounted for 23 percent of expenses by Americans in 1966 and after thirty years, this ratio remarkably increased to 45%. The expense of dining out in 1966 was 7 percent and it had doubled in 1996 (14%). Only 1 percent of the American population's money went on purchasing computers but this figure rose to 10 percent in 1996. Food comprised 44 percent of all the expenses made by Americans in 1966, and it fell to 14 percent in 1996. In 1966, petrol and furniture outlay was at 9 percent and 10 percent respectively and remained relatively unchanged over a 30-year period. Lastly, expenditure on books had plunged from 6 percent to 1 percent at the end of the period.
The pie charts compare Americans' expenditure in 7
different
categories
namely
food, cars, petrol, restaurants, furniture, computers and books in 1966 with that of 1996.
Overall
, the least significant percentage of spending by Americans went on computers in 1966 while the food cost them the highest percentage. After three decades, cars became the largest segment of expenses by American residents and the smallest segment
was spent
on books, percentage-wise.

Cars accounted for 23
percent
of expenses by Americans in 1966 and after thirty years, this ratio
remarkably
increased to 45%. The
expense
of dining out in 1966 was 7
percent
and it had doubled in 1996 (14%).
Only
1
percent
of the American population's money went on purchasing computers
but
this figure rose to 10
percent
in 1996. Food comprised 44
percent
of all the expenses made by Americans in 1966, and it fell to 14
percent
in 1996. In 1966, petrol and furniture outlay was at 9
percent
and 10
percent
respectively
and remained
relatively
unchanged over a 30-year period.
Lastly
, expenditure on books had plunged from 6
percent
to 1
percent
at the
end
of the period.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. v. 2

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189 words
6.5
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