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The chart below shows the Higher Colleges of Technology graduates in the UAE. v.2

The chart below shows the Higher Colleges of Technology graduates in the UAE. v. 2
The provided bar chart compares the number of male and female grads from the Higher Colleges of Technology colleges in the UAE. As is seen in the given diagram, there are more female graduates who earned their degree from these colleges than the number of male graduates. The most outstanding feature of the graph is female graduates outnumber male graduates in all the colleges. For example, in Dubai, there are 30% more women grads than men grads. There are also large differences in Al Ain and in Ras Al Khaimah in terms of graduates females and males. However, the number of men and women alumni is almost equal in the colleges in Abu Dhabi. Besides, Ras Al Khaimah college has less than 300 students altogether, while Abu Dhabi has about 600 and Dubai has almost 1000 students who earned their graduation. In summary, women graduates have outnumbered men graduates in all the colleges, and there are significant differences in the size of the colleges in terms of their students' number who are awarded honours.
The provided bar chart compares the
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grads from the Higher Colleges of Technology colleges in the UAE. As is
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diagram, there are more
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who earned their degree from these colleges than the
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of male graduates.

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female
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outnumber male
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in all the colleges.
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grads. There are
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in terms of
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and
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.
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of
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and women alumni is almost equal in the colleges in Abu Dhabi.
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college has less than 300 students altogether, while Abu Dhabi has about 600 and Dubai has almost 1000 students who earned their graduation.

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have outnumbered
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men
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in all the colleges, and there are significant differences in the size of the colleges in terms of their students'
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who
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the Higher Colleges of Technology graduates in the UAE. v. 2

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6.0
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