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The chart below shows the employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate. (Study Sample) v.1

The chart below shows the employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.
The given bar graph compares the data about the job proportions of man and woman in 6 different nations for 2 years, 1995 and 2005. It is cogent from this graph that occupation sector was dominated by male employees for these two years. Overall, the employment rate had increased in 2005, as compared to 1995. In addition, the highest rate of employment was for 2005' s male employees. Moreover, while x-axis represents these countries, percentage is indicated by y axis. In 1995, the highest male employment rate was in Iceland with almost 70%, whereas Switzerland' s female employment dominated woman' s department with more than two-quarters. Furthermore, the maximum male and female employment difference was in New Zealand (Approximately 60% and close to a quarter), the lowest difference was observed in UK (just above two-quarters and around 50%). In 2005, Iceland' s male occupation rate was highest with more than 3 quarters, while three-fifths female were employed in Switzerland, which was highest. However, in Australia male employment rate was lowest for men' s catagory with just below 70%.
The
given
bar graph compares the data about the job proportions of

man
and woman in 6
different
nations for 2 years, 1995 and 2005. It is cogent from this graph that occupation sector
was dominated
by male employees for these two years.

Overall
, the
employment
rate
had increased in 2005, as compared to 1995.
In addition
, the highest
rate
of
employment
was for 2005' s male employees.
Moreover
, while x-axis represents these countries, percentage
is indicated
by
y axis
.

In 1995, the highest male
employment
rate
was in Iceland with almost 70%, whereas
Switzerland&
#039; s female
employment
dominated
woman&
#039; s department with more than two-quarters.
Furthermore
, the maximum male and female
employment
difference was in New Zealand (Approximately 60% and close to a quarter), the lowest difference
was observed
in UK (
just
above two-quarters and around 50%).

In 2005,
Iceland&
#039; s male occupation
rate
was highest with more than 3 quarters, while three-fifths female
were employed
in Switzerland, which was highest.
However
, in Australia male
employment
rate
was lowest for
men&
#039; s
catagory
with
just
below 70%.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
178 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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