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The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. v.1

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. v. 1
The supplied bar graph compares the employment rates between men and female in 6 different countries for the years 1995 and 2005. As is observed from the given data, the employment rate among men was higher than that of females in all of the given six countries and the overall employment conditions in Iceland, Switzerland was comparatively better than the other four countries. As is given in the diagram, initially in 1995, more than 65% males were employed in Switzerland and in Iceland while in other four countries this rate was less than 60%. After a decade, the male employment percentage reached over 70% except in Australia. On the contrary, in 1995, the female employment rate was over 50% only in Switzerland and for the rest of the countries, this was from 28% to 58%. This quota also improved over the 10 years, and in 2005, female employee rate reached to almost 70% in Switzerland and for the rest of the countries, it was 50%. In summary, the male had a better employment record than the female and in 10 years the employment opportunity for both male and female increased.
The supplied bar graph compares the
employment
rates
between
men
and
female
in 6
different
countries
for the years 1995 and 2005. As
is observed
from the
given
data, the
employment
rate
among
men
was higher than that of
females
in
all of the
given
six
countries
and the
overall
employment
conditions in Iceland, Switzerland was
comparatively
better than the other four countries.

As is
given
in the diagram,
initially
in 1995, more than 65%
males
were employed
in Switzerland and in Iceland while in other four
countries
this
rate
was less than 60%. After a decade, the male
employment
percentage reached over 70% except in Australia.
On the contrary
, in 1995, the
female
employment
rate
was over 50%
only
in Switzerland and for the rest of the
countries
, this was from 28% to 58%. This quota
also
improved
over the 10 years, and in 2005,
female
employee
rate
reached to almost 70% in Switzerland and for the rest of the
countries
, it was 50%.

In summary, the male had a better
employment
record than the
female
and in 10 years the
employment
opportunity for both male and
female
increased.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005. v. 1

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